Blood of the Heart
Though in my heart I bleed this pain I’ve tried to never know,
In my ears, I try to hear, a cry that won’t let me go
I see a ray that shines a light, and God I beg for more,
But in my daze, my hopeful praise, is no different than before,
Quietly, I sit and bleed, too weak to moan for help
But in my mind, I rage these thoughts, I cannot seem to quell
Privately, I slowly wilt,
My tears are cried in vain,
It’s pride that is my deadly sin;
It is my private shame
Tell me I’ve been foolish,
or sulked my tears in vain,
But when I close my eyes I see a never ending game
Though in my heart, besieged by grief, I wilt these soulful tears
With fear I clinch, from shame that went, a heart that bares the cinch
So now I’ve taken wonder;
Now I’ve prayed for help;
And in my heart that pain still bleeds...
and on it I still dwell
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Hey man! here's an ego boost from a random stranger.
You've got a feel for poetry, dude!!
it's nice and lyrical.
but...here's a few tips...
why don't you try focusing your feelings onto a metaphorical subject? like, i had a poem that focused on my friends pale hands when ,all the while, i was expressing that dead feeling you get after failing an exam.
trust me it works.
oh, and you might wanna try cutting out useless words like "the" or "a" or "it" and so on. makes it sound more pronounced.
and, dude, challange yerself!!! try to get matching numbers of syllables for each line.
Ku Ku,
It brought tears to my eyes. It made me feel bad. Have I contributed to this?
Black Stroke
No_the_game and nosthegametoo r different person. I am glad you like at least one of us.
Peace
Blood of the heart,
in grief all tears born,
nothing can save the soul
from memories of pain..
@ Storm:
Thanks Storm. You got the poem right on. Thanks for the compliment.
@ lady in satin:
Thank you for reading. It makes a difference to have someone appreciate your writing.
@ Foolosopher:
Thank you for the compliment. It’s been a while since I’ve written, and longer since I have openly shared my writing. I’m happy that people are reading. And thank you for the input, I always consider suggestions.
@ Anonymous:
Just a piece of me I want/need to share.
@ amber7dragonfly:
You’ve got the soul of a poet. I enjoy your writing as well.
Beautiful words.
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